The paragraphs below depict a micro-story I wrote for a blog I found recently. Interestingly enough, it is always fun to include classic literary devices within a ‘word-filtered’ sentence combination. I enjoyed editing the story; the original was over 300 words, over 200 words of their submission requirement. My final submission was 98 words. Due to the differences of the two drafts, I included both of them, here. By request I will remove the actual submission.
Sam and Sam
Both car doors closed close to the same time. A teenage school girl named Samantha and her male friend named Sam both exited their parents’ vehicles in front of the local bookstore known for its darkstout coffee. “How goes it?” she asked. “Great,” he said. They went in to order a coffee. They both liked cold house coffee; it was cheaper than the more extravagant lattes. “I will take a house coffee on ice,” said Sam, attempting to hand the cashier with crimson red-blonde hair a five. She then heard Sam say, “I will have the same, however I will pay for both.” She said thank you and Sam handed the cashier a ten.
After receiving their coffees they explored the store. There were a great many exciting books and periodicals. They both loved to read and did well in school. After noticing how much the bestsellers cost, they visited the music section. Sam and Sam liked most music, however they loved rock and dance the most. “Check it out!” said Sam, and Samantha ran over to him. It was a newly released greatest hits live recording by “nin”.
“Let’s put our money together and we can listen to it later,” said Samantha, too excited to wonder about teenage puppy love. “Okay,” said Sam – their parents would be back anytime. Their hour was nearing its death. They made it to the checkout line and it seemed to be keeping the pace of a sprinting post-storm snail.
Samantha gave Sam her five and it was their turn. There existed a man behind them deep in thought, holding a book titled, “On Living Well”. The new C.D. was listed for $11.89; the teller said, “Your total is twelve ninety-six.” “We are short seventy-six cents,” said Sam on accident. Samantha was confused; the man behind them said, “Keep your money. I will buy that disc for you.” “Wow,” said Sam, “What is your name?” “Atticus.”
Sam and Sam, by J. C. Martin, III
They exited their parents’ vehicles in front of a bookstore known for darkstout coffee. “Howdy,” she said. “Hi,” went inside.
“Cold house coffee,” requested Samantha, tried paying. Sam said, “I will have the same,” paid for both. “Thank you.“
They explored. “Check it out!” exclaimed Sam, seeing a new release by “nin“. “Let’s listen to it later.” “Okay.“
Their hour dwindled. Checkout kept the pace of a sprinting poststorm snail. Samantha gave Sam her five.
A man held a book, “On Well Living”. “$12.96.” “We’re short.” “I’ll buy it.” “Okay.” “What is your name?” “Atticus.“